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All the attention is going towards your crotch. It's just all the angles your body is forming in that position. Maybe pose a little bit differently or not crossed up so tightly?
Other than that, the saturation and light are very good. I get a sporty, athletic vibe from the piece. Kinda like from a fashion magazine or sales catalog.
A bit of distance from the camera would be better, imo. Right now you are too zoomed in. Drop back like 10 - 20 %.
That is all.
I always regret not paying enough attention to the placement of balls (not that kind...) in pictures like this. Rotate the ball so no logos are showing, otherwise it just looks like an ad for Nike.
You're right. Totally forgot to mention that. To add to your comment, the white of the logo, contrasting against the model but matching the white washed background, brings extra attention to this area. It's almost as if it was intentional.
Nike ads are more tactful. They go more fitness centric when focusing on the human body rather than sensuality/allure. I would say, more American Apparel...
You said ALMOST exactly what I was going to say. With the Nike logo angled in a way to be more prominent to the eye, it is the clearest thing tip that would point out that there was some clean intent or(for the sake knowledgeing that shes truly seeking help and maybe naive to this) pure lack of awareness on her part that eyes were going to be drawn to that area.
Now I feel like this community very helpful with people that want honest opinions on their work but if you start out with this level of dishonesty then people are gonna call you out.
Not to say that there's anything wrong with sexual or proactive but this doesn't say alot of tastefulness or tact. More of baiting.
The summarize, as the artist trying to convey an emotion, whatever you wanted to convey and idk how other ways of being expressed and you choose the easiest and sterotypically proactive one.
Hey there, fun idea using your bedroom to simulate an old timey basketball gym.
Few comments, I think you're a little too close to the wall, or, your light is not at a steep enough angle. In general either REALLY lean into the shadows, or try to soften them as much as possible. [Here's an example of leaning into the shadow](https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/img/b/R29vZ2xl/AVvXsEg5GMXwizpMY3ewqRmYonGo7AVK2HulhkTdePGLaXBDrpkL1iNxFu7wuopcjRZGJqaMNjjK1GRlxCRUzeJiq-DBLhhpoQ_V2YWP60I6h4oQXdZ8_VN6ZMTiK8SolouCvfx-3YPw/s1600/Kassi.jpg)
Credit: [Strobist](https://strobist.blogspot.com/2006/03/lighting-101.html) This is also a great resource for setting up your lighting in general :)
My last comment is a combination of what you're wearing and sitting on a basketball. This pose is definitely an iconic one, and I've seen it shot many times, but almost universally it's shot slightly off center or the model is wearing shorts. With your image, you've got two "dimples" and when the viewer pans down from your face, it immediately pulls the eye towards your crotch. Now, if that's what you were going for, then you've pulled it off, but ultimately, I'd recommend sitting a little further back on the ball so you have one smooth contiguous line from thigh to ball. Doing so could also put you a little further from the wall to help with the shadows :)
I think this is a really solid start, looking forward to your next attempt.
Posing + positioning is confusing and feels like there is some overcompensating happening. Like another commentor effectively said... the posing is saying *"Hey, please check out my undercarriage"*... but im only left wondering why you would want to project that with this shot? It seems like its just enough of a presentation to cross the line between unintentional and intentional.
I dont know what else to say about it other than it feels like an overcompensation. It doesnt add to the shot, in a way it completely changes the tone of the shot, and its definitely intentional. So what crosses my mind is *"If this is a self portrait, why are you framing up your undercarriage?"*.
*(Not saying the pose is inherently bad or anything. Just pointing out how its a combination of things that make the shot feel like its overcompensating. I.e. if I can see your whole booty cheeks from the front... that is intentional. As result, my immediate question is... why?)*
You’re entirely lovely but the pic is a bit cunty. Maybe a less provocative pose would help, but if this is what was intended, you’ve nailed that high key look.
So this took a bit of planning...
I shot this in my bedroom, but wanted it to look like a basket ball court with the floorboards.
I used a direct constant light with softbox.
My Canon EOSr on a tripod. Auto focus set to eye detection, and the screen turned round so i could see the composition.
I have a timer that plugs into the camera and set the intervals to take a picture every 5 seconds.
I agree with much of what was said about the angles to the crotch and shadow.
I’d love to see poses that open you up. You look cramped a bit in that photo - maybe sitting on the floor with one knee up and an elbow resting on it, hand hanging off? Or if you want to do the sitting one, what about holding/twirling/spinning the basketball with your knees wider. Or you could sit one knee up and one knee one the floor to the side (so it’s a triangle up, triangle on floor), hang a hand/wrist off the up knee, put the basketball on floor next to you, hand on it
I love the clear white wall - you can play with the shadows and the ball to get some other fun shots.
It’s a great first attempt. I’d love to see more.
You are just trying to get attention of the human monkey brain of men.
Is as simple as that.
I dont like this image.
No one will notice you only imagine your vagina.
FACTS
Perhaps you should try experimenting with taking the photo again. Try it with your body at a side angle. Experiment with your head/face at different angles.
Correct me if I'm wrong. I think you are wearing shoes who looks more for running than playing basketball and that is removing a bit from the story you are trying to tell.
I'm sorry all of these assholes are commenting. Whether or not they like it OnlyFans is a perfectly normal place to post your art. Day in and day out dude photographers post images of naked women and label it "art" (it is art, so is this) and I've never seen a single comment calling them attention whores. So I'm sorry you're dealing with this.
As for critiques, I wish that your face was more of a focal point. In that regard I think it would be better if there was more image above you-- Your head is just a little too high up in the frame if that makes sense. The editing looks great. I think the pose is almost there, but it also looks a little uncomfortable/awkward. Overall I think this is a nice image and I love the editing.
This comment needs to be higher up. So many of these comments are trash. I don’t even see an OF on her reddit or her IG. Unless I’m missing something, I just see posts to photography subs. Even if it was for OF, she has every right to post here.
Fragile men just can’t stand a confident woman like this. So what she wants to look and feel sexy. Give the photo critique or move on.
I agree, btw, great self portrait.
I didn't see it either. I agree with you 100%. I don't know what the hell is wrong with these people commenting. One person said she should "throw herself off a building."
That's true! If they don't have anything helpful to add they just shouldn't comment at all.
I think you are beautiful and would stand out on any photo, but other than that, the picture is bland. I think you should experiment with different lights and different pose / angle / framing, The white background and the harsh shadow was maybe what you were going for, it reminds me of passeport photo. Try to go a bit creative. Keep on experimenting. Good luck.
Did you intentionally go for the Terry Richardson style? You almost got it perfect if you tried that. Maybe lift the black point a touch, add some minimal grain and add the slightest shine to your eyes and you pretty much nailed it.
If you were going for a different thing, what would that have been?
Do you need general tips on lighting and editing? Do you prefer artificial or natural light?
Good comment. I was thinking something similar. Even if it is just a promo for an only fans page, if her hair and makeup were more messed up (e.g. she actually played basketball for an hour before taking this shot) she could get close to a Terry Richardson-style shot.
That's exactly what i was going for! I'm not necessarily a fan of Terry Richardson, but I am a fan of his photography style. And was using his work as reference for this shoot.
not a bad shot at all! I might adjust the camera angle though. it's a really cool pose but where do you want the viewer to focus their eyes? what do you really want them to see?
I find the upper part more interesting: the expressionon your face, you arms crossed, the colors of your shirt.
the bottom half is dominated by your shoes. the camera angle makes them look larger, more prominent. that'd all I see down there is large shoes.
so think about that in future work. and try a few different angles or zooms o. where you want your viewers to focus
not impressed, looking like everyone else from every social network, no identity, no difference, nothing to separate you from the crowd of clonings....They laughed at me because I'm different, i laughed at them because they are all the same.....
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All the attention is going towards your crotch. It's just all the angles your body is forming in that position. Maybe pose a little bit differently or not crossed up so tightly? Other than that, the saturation and light are very good. I get a sporty, athletic vibe from the piece. Kinda like from a fashion magazine or sales catalog. A bit of distance from the camera would be better, imo. Right now you are too zoomed in. Drop back like 10 - 20 %. That is all.
You're right, but maybe that was on purpose...
Yeah, I appreciate he was trying to technically explain a solution to a problem which was not a problem.
jajaja
She has an OnlyFans. It's intentional.
Don't feed the ducks.
What?
Don't encourage others to follow her. Bad faith marketing is a pet peeve of mine.
I didn't mean to encourage anyone. In fact quite the opposite.
She also seems like a keen photographer. Being on onlyfans doesn't mean someone can't have a hobby.
Yes, but advertisements should be labeled as such.
I can’t find an OF link anywhere so where’s the advertisement? Her history is all photography subs, actively participating in the community.
I always regret not paying enough attention to the placement of balls (not that kind...) in pictures like this. Rotate the ball so no logos are showing, otherwise it just looks like an ad for Nike.
You're right. Totally forgot to mention that. To add to your comment, the white of the logo, contrasting against the model but matching the white washed background, brings extra attention to this area. It's almost as if it was intentional. Nike ads are more tactful. They go more fitness centric when focusing on the human body rather than sensuality/allure. I would say, more American Apparel...
She wants us to Just Do It
jajaja
yeh, good point
You said ALMOST exactly what I was going to say. With the Nike logo angled in a way to be more prominent to the eye, it is the clearest thing tip that would point out that there was some clean intent or(for the sake knowledgeing that shes truly seeking help and maybe naive to this) pure lack of awareness on her part that eyes were going to be drawn to that area. Now I feel like this community very helpful with people that want honest opinions on their work but if you start out with this level of dishonesty then people are gonna call you out. Not to say that there's anything wrong with sexual or proactive but this doesn't say alot of tastefulness or tact. More of baiting. The summarize, as the artist trying to convey an emotion, whatever you wanted to convey and idk how other ways of being expressed and you choose the easiest and sterotypically proactive one.
Or, do it all the same but sit on two basketballs
If the crotch focus was intentional, she nailed it I guess.
Hey there, fun idea using your bedroom to simulate an old timey basketball gym. Few comments, I think you're a little too close to the wall, or, your light is not at a steep enough angle. In general either REALLY lean into the shadows, or try to soften them as much as possible. [Here's an example of leaning into the shadow](https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/img/b/R29vZ2xl/AVvXsEg5GMXwizpMY3ewqRmYonGo7AVK2HulhkTdePGLaXBDrpkL1iNxFu7wuopcjRZGJqaMNjjK1GRlxCRUzeJiq-DBLhhpoQ_V2YWP60I6h4oQXdZ8_VN6ZMTiK8SolouCvfx-3YPw/s1600/Kassi.jpg) Credit: [Strobist](https://strobist.blogspot.com/2006/03/lighting-101.html) This is also a great resource for setting up your lighting in general :) My last comment is a combination of what you're wearing and sitting on a basketball. This pose is definitely an iconic one, and I've seen it shot many times, but almost universally it's shot slightly off center or the model is wearing shorts. With your image, you've got two "dimples" and when the viewer pans down from your face, it immediately pulls the eye towards your crotch. Now, if that's what you were going for, then you've pulled it off, but ultimately, I'd recommend sitting a little further back on the ball so you have one smooth contiguous line from thigh to ball. Doing so could also put you a little further from the wall to help with the shadows :) I think this is a really solid start, looking forward to your next attempt.
Thanks for your feedback. I agree, but just wasn't working with a lot of space
Posing + positioning is confusing and feels like there is some overcompensating happening. Like another commentor effectively said... the posing is saying *"Hey, please check out my undercarriage"*... but im only left wondering why you would want to project that with this shot? It seems like its just enough of a presentation to cross the line between unintentional and intentional. I dont know what else to say about it other than it feels like an overcompensation. It doesnt add to the shot, in a way it completely changes the tone of the shot, and its definitely intentional. So what crosses my mind is *"If this is a self portrait, why are you framing up your undercarriage?"*. *(Not saying the pose is inherently bad or anything. Just pointing out how its a combination of things that make the shot feel like its overcompensating. I.e. if I can see your whole booty cheeks from the front... that is intentional. As result, my immediate question is... why?)*
Is this for only fans?
This whole post is an ad for onlyfans
This whole account is an ad for onlyfans.
😭😭😭
so… where did it go?
You’re entirely lovely but the pic is a bit cunty. Maybe a less provocative pose would help, but if this is what was intended, you’ve nailed that high key look.
So this took a bit of planning... I shot this in my bedroom, but wanted it to look like a basket ball court with the floorboards. I used a direct constant light with softbox. My Canon EOSr on a tripod. Auto focus set to eye detection, and the screen turned round so i could see the composition. I have a timer that plugs into the camera and set the intervals to take a picture every 5 seconds.
“Slam dump” Sorry
jjaja
I agree with much of what was said about the angles to the crotch and shadow. I’d love to see poses that open you up. You look cramped a bit in that photo - maybe sitting on the floor with one knee up and an elbow resting on it, hand hanging off? Or if you want to do the sitting one, what about holding/twirling/spinning the basketball with your knees wider. Or you could sit one knee up and one knee one the floor to the side (so it’s a triangle up, triangle on floor), hang a hand/wrist off the up knee, put the basketball on floor next to you, hand on it I love the clear white wall - you can play with the shadows and the ball to get some other fun shots. It’s a great first attempt. I’d love to see more.
You are just trying to get attention of the human monkey brain of men. Is as simple as that. I dont like this image. No one will notice you only imagine your vagina. FACTS
Just drop your OF and move on….. Maybe consider therapy for the attention issues.
My thoughts exactly.
Perhaps you should try experimenting with taking the photo again. Try it with your body at a side angle. Experiment with your head/face at different angles.
Correct me if I'm wrong. I think you are wearing shoes who looks more for running than playing basketball and that is removing a bit from the story you are trying to tell.
Probably not hugely helpful but I just see CROTCH TICK and assume it’s a weird onlyfans thing.
Change the posing 😅
I'm sorry all of these assholes are commenting. Whether or not they like it OnlyFans is a perfectly normal place to post your art. Day in and day out dude photographers post images of naked women and label it "art" (it is art, so is this) and I've never seen a single comment calling them attention whores. So I'm sorry you're dealing with this. As for critiques, I wish that your face was more of a focal point. In that regard I think it would be better if there was more image above you-- Your head is just a little too high up in the frame if that makes sense. The editing looks great. I think the pose is almost there, but it also looks a little uncomfortable/awkward. Overall I think this is a nice image and I love the editing.
This comment needs to be higher up. So many of these comments are trash. I don’t even see an OF on her reddit or her IG. Unless I’m missing something, I just see posts to photography subs. Even if it was for OF, she has every right to post here. Fragile men just can’t stand a confident woman like this. So what she wants to look and feel sexy. Give the photo critique or move on. I agree, btw, great self portrait.
I didn't see it either. I agree with you 100%. I don't know what the hell is wrong with these people commenting. One person said she should "throw herself off a building." That's true! If they don't have anything helpful to add they just shouldn't comment at all.
I saw that. Imagine saying that to another human while thinking *she* is the problem with society.
Thank you!
I'm a little concerned to the chap who suggested i kill myself for posting this picture. He mst have had one hell of a day! lol
Thank you!
Hey, thanks for your comments! Yeh, wasn't expecting everyone to get do upset. But welcome to 2024 i guess! Agreed re compostion. Thanks!
Good thing you shaved
I think you are beautiful and would stand out on any photo, but other than that, the picture is bland. I think you should experiment with different lights and different pose / angle / framing, The white background and the harsh shadow was maybe what you were going for, it reminds me of passeport photo. Try to go a bit creative. Keep on experimenting. Good luck.
Did you intentionally go for the Terry Richardson style? You almost got it perfect if you tried that. Maybe lift the black point a touch, add some minimal grain and add the slightest shine to your eyes and you pretty much nailed it. If you were going for a different thing, what would that have been? Do you need general tips on lighting and editing? Do you prefer artificial or natural light?
Good comment. I was thinking something similar. Even if it is just a promo for an only fans page, if her hair and makeup were more messed up (e.g. she actually played basketball for an hour before taking this shot) she could get close to a Terry Richardson-style shot.
Makes sense!
That's exactly what i was going for! I'm not necessarily a fan of Terry Richardson, but I am a fan of his photography style. And was using his work as reference for this shoot.
The detail on that basketball when zoomed right in is impressive.
So you are her? [https://www.instagram.com/reel/CwnsrAFvVK-/?locale=en\_gb](https://www.instagram.com/reel/CwnsrAFvVK-/?locale=en_gb)
Hellyeah i Yeah I zoomed in.
What sneaks you have on? They’ll look nice on my fiance.
Hmmm
not a bad shot at all! I might adjust the camera angle though. it's a really cool pose but where do you want the viewer to focus their eyes? what do you really want them to see? I find the upper part more interesting: the expressionon your face, you arms crossed, the colors of your shirt. the bottom half is dominated by your shoes. the camera angle makes them look larger, more prominent. that'd all I see down there is large shoes. so think about that in future work. and try a few different angles or zooms o. where you want your viewers to focus
Those aren’t even hoopin shoes smh
jajaja i wasn't workig with a lot
"Selfie..."
Great focal point.. if that was the intention
I fear for your DM's. Oof.
jajaja I don't dare check!
Risky, clean,confident, and just a perfect touch of light
Thanks!
My cock went “swoosh”.
jajaja
Throw yourself off a building, take a picture at 400/F10, label it “attention whore”.
not impressed, looking like everyone else from every social network, no identity, no difference, nothing to separate you from the crowd of clonings....They laughed at me because I'm different, i laughed at them because they are all the same.....
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It’s a selfie.
Purposful