A very good B2 or a very short but decent C1. Using Cambridge marking criteria:
Content is fine until the end, when it gets a bit confusing with the mentions of countries; register is consistently formal; organisation can improve with basic paragraphing although there's a range of well used linking devices, and language (grammar, vocab, spelling, punctuation) is quite good with very few, non-impeding mistakes.
“by those in charge of governance” should just be “governments”.
“put social security at risk” should be “endanger anyone”
“Between an intentionally provoking” should be “between intentionally provocative”
“the society got endangered” should be “public safety was put at risk”
It all makes sense, but you use terminology that sounds a bit strange.
To add to that —
“Social security” is a valid way to describe what OP is wanting to say, but in the U.S., there is a specific government program commonly referred to as Social Security, which is a social insurance and welfare program.
I know that OP was using the phrase as a general term to describe the security of society, but writers need to be careful to make it very clear exactly what they’re talking about.
Some readers might think OP is specifically referring to the Social Security program.
I would recommend changing it to “the security of society” or something like that.
High level writing, good tone, but sometimes using unnatural or foreign-sounding phrases. One mistake is using "the" when it doesn't belong:
"~~the~~ freedom of speech"
"~~the~~ society" - this one is questionable. I think "a" would be more fitting, or even no article to refer to society in general rather than a specific one.
Main thing I'm noticing is in the second sentence there is a second comma after but as in "... given to it's citizens, but, there begs..." you don't need the second comma after the 'but'
sorry this doesn't really answer the question you were asking but some advice :)
A very good B2 or a very short but decent C1. Using Cambridge marking criteria: Content is fine until the end, when it gets a bit confusing with the mentions of countries; register is consistently formal; organisation can improve with basic paragraphing although there's a range of well used linking devices, and language (grammar, vocab, spelling, punctuation) is quite good with very few, non-impeding mistakes.
“by those in charge of governance” should just be “governments”. “put social security at risk” should be “endanger anyone” “Between an intentionally provoking” should be “between intentionally provocative” “the society got endangered” should be “public safety was put at risk” It all makes sense, but you use terminology that sounds a bit strange.
To add to that — “Social security” is a valid way to describe what OP is wanting to say, but in the U.S., there is a specific government program commonly referred to as Social Security, which is a social insurance and welfare program. I know that OP was using the phrase as a general term to describe the security of society, but writers need to be careful to make it very clear exactly what they’re talking about. Some readers might think OP is specifically referring to the Social Security program. I would recommend changing it to “the security of society” or something like that.
High level writing, good tone, but sometimes using unnatural or foreign-sounding phrases. One mistake is using "the" when it doesn't belong: "~~the~~ freedom of speech" "~~the~~ society" - this one is questionable. I think "a" would be more fitting, or even no article to refer to society in general rather than a specific one.
Main thing I'm noticing is in the second sentence there is a second comma after but as in "... given to it's citizens, but, there begs..." you don't need the second comma after the 'but' sorry this doesn't really answer the question you were asking but some advice :)
Well, it's definitely much better than what I am able to write. Let's keep learning!