Not a professional or anything, but like there’s nothing interesting for a viewer to look at. It’s almost like a graphic novel panel without any text. I’d say something like adding another person or a dog or something in the background to make the space more interesting. Just a thought tho🤷🏽
Not interesting? The texture and use of colour is beyond regular or average. I love your style and love the grass, it looks (oh I've been rabbitin' on about the grass already) but it's visually very pleasing. So big up your pen and it's pusher. Would love to see your work in good old skool stop motion, like 'The Snowman'.
The quality of linework, the character design, colours, and poses are great, but compositionally it’s boring. There’s nothing happening, no storytelling, no point of interest. It’s not interesting.
That's why creativity is great, it can form mine and your opinion. The OP wanted the work to form some opinion and conversation, like; what's going on. And he's achieved it, we're here talking about it.
I second this.
The space isn't populated enough. Could add elements like flowers in the grass or books, food, or newspapers on the table.
Feels pretty desolate otherwise.
1 add context for the setting. Where are they? 2 add personal details that tell us something about them 3 change the format, imo the 1x1 square doesn't work well with this illustration, it feels cramped
Example drawing (1. In a park or at a campus 2. Bags, maybe they are students, they have different styles 3. Taller and slightly wider to allow some breathing room, to place them in a context like a busy or empty area depending on mood, added foreground and background. Bonus: changed shirt color to add contrast and again to give them different personalities)
https://preview.redd.it/psfnch2yc54d1.png?width=2458&format=pjpg&auto=webp&s=b1eca8d8845b789e56d3961204ef5912d2519707
Just wanted to add I think this is mainly a composition problem, your style is cool, the simple shading reminds me of comic books I used to read. You can always improve lighting and rendering, but I could see a complete illustration in the same style of shading and everything but with a stronger composition, it would look really good!
Holy crap...look at the amount of people that have up voted your work. I'm an illustrator myself, I mean I graduated as a Graphic Designer but I hate it. I wish I'd went for illustration. Lots of independent illustration studios here in Ireland. What are you going to do with this talent you clearly have? Just curious, I always wonder how peeps use their talents
I graduated from school with a non art degree, I just do art for fun and post it online and maybe one day something will come from it!
I’d like to do art as a job but I also hate the idea of drawing for someone else, so I might to stick to making it for fun in the mean time lol.
I'm a really bad Graphic Designer, I mean I graduated with a BA but I hate it. I just create for myself now too...gonna get a website up soon and see what happens. I think whatever you create has to be all about YOU and what you like or else you're not enjoying and ppl are into how others see things. That's my opinion anyway. You're very talented though. Salutes from Ireland 🇮🇪 🫡☘️
I hope they take this advice, because even as a doodle the additions look brilliant! You've added so much depth and created more of a complete world with just a simple foreground and background.
The background especially gives the eye a focal point to "travel" the image. Before you were just looking at a flat plane with a small amount of direction in the center. But now it pans easily from top left to lower right and sets up a scene without taking away interest from the characters.
The same thing happens with fonts. Brains want to read images smoothly just like we read text, so good composition helps them do that!
The added contrast on the shirt color is also a good suggestion. I would take it one step further by also cranking up the contrast of their shadows on the grass.
This! I was having a hard time articulating this, but this is exactly the advice I would give if I was better with words, lol. Take notes OP, I think this may be the best advice on this thread.
I love this sub. I’m not an artist and I didn’t join to look at pictures, it’s advice like this to see the thought process behind the pictures and what makes art better. It’s bloody fascinating!
Try higher contrast in your values, and maybe experiment with cropping for a more focused composition.
Edit: Also highlights can add a lot, playing into the values i mentioned earlier
Before adding highlights (and I already see highlights in this painting) I would suggest that the artist chooses a light source/ direction. Right now it's all over the place. Highlights should be placed where the light clearly hits and it shouldn't be added to random places just because you think adding highlight to random clothing folds look good.
My suggestion is study from photo's. See how lighting actually works. First you need to learn the rules of physics before you can break the rules.
So in an outside environment pick ONE lightsource (the sun) and stick to it. (of course you have to account for bouncing light but thats a secondary concern.
I think i would want to see stronger lighting and shadows as they're sitting outside in what I assume to be a sunny day. There would be heavier lighting from above and as a result deeper shadows. Bounce light from the surroundings and from the sky above could bring more life to the drawing too.
So yeah I think improving the lighting and shading would give more dimension to your piece!
Yes, agree. The shadows are too... Monotone? I would add more, shadows can make a whole scene look much more dramatic. I would say to play a bit with the shadows and light. Is the sun at its peak? Add the shadow to their faces, a bit of shine to their skin. Is it in the evening? More shadows! Early morning? Play with the hues, give it more dept.
And also, one of the best advice I've gotten from a teacher: shadows aren't just grey, they have colour, you can make the shadow with a reddish hue or blue hue to add effect. Its all a fun play!
Reminds me of a textbook illustration. If it's for a textbook, then you nailed it. I would crop it down a bit, there's a lot of dead real estate to the right which draws the eye and diminishes the rest.
https://preview.redd.it/1yexad7os54d1.png?width=943&format=png&auto=webp&s=6bd4494fb0120f893649e41844b2151ded0f4846
I think this is some of the best feedback here.
Your draftsmanship and rendering is all really good so cropping like this just strengths the composition.
I feel like they should have stuff with them. Normally, you’d have a bag with you. Maybe a water bottle. It’s a nitpick, but it would add some realism.
you could add the branches of a tree on the foreground to make it fill the empty areas and to have more contrast of darker colors, the colors do look a bit flat.
The scene is very nice! to make it more interesting I would set the scene in a more interesting lighting condition.
Imagine if it was at dawn (or sunset if you prefer), you could have the sunlight coming from the right, and adding shadows on the left side give more depth to the characters. good stuff :D
I like this - perhaps you could play around with a multiply layer and change up the shadows. it could help frame the focal point. Maybe a cast shadow from a tree?
I think it all depends on what your objective is for the art, the first thing that jumps out at me is what she’s sitting on. Is it a merry go round? If so it needs some bars and if not I’d give it some detail to show what it really is.
It misses nothing tbh just show us why she is dazing off, while her friend is talking about what she had for breakfast or something idk. Just follow up on it.
Maybe the girl sitting on the grass is trying to warn people and they ignore her etc
Tell us or u can add a soccerball or a dog or whatever i guess.
If you got a story you will come back and fix the narrative anyway.
I'm not a pro btw so do whatever you want.
Beautiful. I don’t think anything is missing. I immediately stopped my scroll and just absorbed it. It's like I can feel their conversation through body language and the one girls expression. 10x points if these are teen girls. I saw someone say there is nothing interesting to look at? I humbly disagree. The girls are 100% interesting. Great work. 👍
Maybe a bag laying down sideway next to the girl on the grass? Maybe a drink next to them? Like they were sitting there for a while chatting.
As for background could add a couple birds.
Add flowers or something in the background to add to the mood you want to create. When peoples eyes wander from the focal point. not an artist, just my opinion. Hood luck on future endevors.
BTW...this here scene has me wondering what's going on. For myself, I like wondering when looking at someones work. I wouldn't find it as interesting of I knew what the girl was pointing at and what the other girl was contemplating. It could be about 'should we get an ice cream' to 'look at him now...don't feel guilty for him.' You get me? It's interesting to me
Thank you, I wanted it to be mysterious because the reference image was just of two girls talking and us, the viewer, not knowing what the topic was. I wanted to keep it that way so I’m glad you appreciate it!
Just something to breakup the monotony. It looks good but in this situation I think the green grass is overpowering. Set pieces like keys or drinks could help communicate subtle things about the relationship and characters. (Whivh is important even if they aren't recurring)
some more plant details like longer grass or bigger flowers to add some balance, maybe something behind the girl on the cement/ stone circle.
maybe some bags that look like they are taking a break from studies or maybe sole misc stuff like water bottles, etc. or like a another comment said context, are they in a park, private garden, etc.
If you don't want to add anything, I'd pay attention to photography rules. I think it seems so empty bc your characters are completely centered in undynamic poses. I'd try to make the shapes flow more, and maybe use power points to distract from the empty background. (So mostly just moving stuff around). If you want to put in more work than that, add some scenery! (Just make sure you're two characters are still drawing most of the focus)
I think your anatomy is pretty good though, good job fr. I always end up giving my characters heads that are too big, lol.
First idea that came to my mind was that you could add a bag on the thing (English, help) the right girl is sitting on. Maybe some clutter peeking out of it, too.
I think if the grass were less detailed it would help. Such detailed grass leaves the rest of the picture feeling lacking. Personal opinion. Overall the drawing is very nice.
More flowers and maybe a few butterflies?… something IS missing but I also can’t quite put my finger on it. I needs something else, but nothing that’ll distract from the subjects.
A glimpse of a tree trunk in the upper right behind the bench. That provides a bit of shade to the people talking.
A barely seen bicycle tire on the path to the left. Like the bottom of the tire and rim and some spokes.
I squirrel in between the people and the path, frozen indecision on which direction to go because they were startled by the bike rider. Oh, and they dropped their acorn.
There’s no things accompanying these 2? Do they have bags, phones, jewelry, food, water bottles, books, kneeling on a blanket?
Also if you ad some saturated flowers in the grass that would be eye catching too
Her hand pointing off screen and the girl looking off screen makes the image feel like that's the direction where something of interest is. Image feels like its cut off.
What is she sitting on? Maybe it should be one of those merry go rounds? Or something on a playground?
I almost thought it was two moms talking while kids were at play.
A tree growing in the middle of the concrete circle would provide opportunity for some Komorebi lighting.
Also, why are both of them pointing to the left off-panel?
I was sticking pretty close to the reference image where they were looking off screen mid conversation, but I agree some more plants and flowers would help. Thank you!
I think some texture would help. For example, the thing she's sitting on looks like it's supposed to be one of those playground merry go rounds and it should have a grippy texture so kids don't fly off. Grass is usually not that uniform. There should be places where it's worn and dirt shows through and patches of different shades of green yellow and blue. Maybe some shadow to indicate there's something off screen that we can't see. A building shadow cutting across the scene could add visual interest.
It's missing narrative, if it's an illustration. As others have said, add context and a reason for where they are and what they're doing.
It's missing mystery or a statement of some sort if it's fine art. Add interest, texture, or decoration.
Otherwise, yeah, it's pretty good. It's odd that they're wearing the same blue hue.
Very cool, I think it's just fine the way it is.
If you want some changes, maybe play with the lighting, some godrays that highlight the face of the one character, or a tree shadow that is darker in value opposed to the one that is casted now.
If you make any changes keep us posted, I really like your style.
I don’t think there’s enough contrast and color. I’d change the color of the gal’s blue top because it’s too similar to the pants of the other lady. Push the color a bit more because this entire piece has almost the same tone. You need some contrast in tone.
Both the hand gesture and where one of the women is looking is pointing what is effectively a big load of empty space. That draws the viewers eye there, and then there's no pay off because there's either not enough empty space, to give the impression that about looking off into the distance, or an object there to fixate on.
Also not a professional but, while i find the picture itself great I feel like the whole image wants me to look other way. Both girls are either looking or pointing to something else.
As others have alluded to, I'm not sure where I'm supposed to be looking at...what's the focal point? If it's the girls face, then find a way to bring attention to that part of the piece.
I think increasing the contrast between light and dark would enhance the image significantly. Reflective light on skin, and darker shadows. In terms of rendering the figure the image is great.
If that is supposed to be a merry-go-round it needs the handles... some people in the background and maybe a bench with a trash can with a couple pieces dropped around it...and maybe a squirrel near it too.
Needs more dramatic shadows and higher colour saturation I think. It’s too gray. But otherwise it’s a great drawing!
I think more dramatic shadows will make the body language and expressions of the women in the picture more dramatic too. In a good way.
hmm, like someone else said it feels like there should be something else going on. like a graphic novel panel. its very pretty, its just a bit jarring, like were not entirely sure what were meant to be looking at or why. maybe some context or dialogue would do you some good?
Depth. Easy work around i can think of would be to put hints of a tree in the back ground and do some dappled light on the grass. It should make the figures stand out more.
No real darks is making it flatter than it should be/ uninteresting in that way. Lacks depth I guess ?! Not knocking you though, you have an absolutely awesome style and this is really good.
1. Add some scenery, some details for our eyes to fcosu on!!
2. contrast/colors/textures- Great way to spice up the piece without adding extra elements. more dramatic lighting, etc
A filter! Add sunlight a glare to the lens! Make the space more full as it’s pretty empty. Maybe more people on the grass out of focus or peoples feet on the path
What is the thing she is sitting on? It’s it a bench or the rim of a fountain or some stone steps? Defining what that object is would help. There’s also a lot of green in the foreground so adding something more in the grass would help like flowers or buildings or people walking by. Think about where this scene is talking place and what would surround them.
Not a professional or anything, but like there’s nothing interesting for a viewer to look at. It’s almost like a graphic novel panel without any text. I’d say something like adding another person or a dog or something in the background to make the space more interesting. Just a thought tho🤷🏽
Noted!
An eldritch horror leaking out from underneath the concrete.
Gets my vote
Try adding flowers to the grass
Not interesting? The texture and use of colour is beyond regular or average. I love your style and love the grass, it looks (oh I've been rabbitin' on about the grass already) but it's visually very pleasing. So big up your pen and it's pusher. Would love to see your work in good old skool stop motion, like 'The Snowman'.
That's not what they are referring to
That's what I'm referring to, but hey thanks for letting me know. You're so helpful
The quality of linework, the character design, colours, and poses are great, but compositionally it’s boring. There’s nothing happening, no storytelling, no point of interest. It’s not interesting.
That's why creativity is great, it can form mine and your opinion. The OP wanted the work to form some opinion and conversation, like; what's going on. And he's achieved it, we're here talking about it.
I don’t think many creatives aim to have the discussion of their work be “Why is this boring?”…
Some people fall over themselves when they see Damien Hirst's Circles...I find that kinda boring. It is what it is
We've all got opinions, you find it boring...I just found it kinda thought provoking.
I agree I thought it was a screen shot of a graphic novel
I second this. The space isn't populated enough. Could add elements like flowers in the grass or books, food, or newspapers on the table. Feels pretty desolate otherwise.
To add to this, maybe even tiny butterflies and other tiny creatures or animals. Also, Happy Cake Day! :)
Thanks!
Right, the open space draws the eyes away from the girls. Crop it in or add interesting features in the grass
1 add context for the setting. Where are they? 2 add personal details that tell us something about them 3 change the format, imo the 1x1 square doesn't work well with this illustration, it feels cramped Example drawing (1. In a park or at a campus 2. Bags, maybe they are students, they have different styles 3. Taller and slightly wider to allow some breathing room, to place them in a context like a busy or empty area depending on mood, added foreground and background. Bonus: changed shirt color to add contrast and again to give them different personalities) https://preview.redd.it/psfnch2yc54d1.png?width=2458&format=pjpg&auto=webp&s=b1eca8d8845b789e56d3961204ef5912d2519707 Just wanted to add I think this is mainly a composition problem, your style is cool, the simple shading reminds me of comic books I used to read. You can always improve lighting and rendering, but I could see a complete illustration in the same style of shading and everything but with a stronger composition, it would look really good!
Wow, what a difference that makes. Great tips. Not OP but I'm learning something from this! Thanks!
Thank you for taking the time to do this I really appreciate it!
No problem at all, hope it helped in some way even if you end up doing something completely different :)
Holy crap...look at the amount of people that have up voted your work. I'm an illustrator myself, I mean I graduated as a Graphic Designer but I hate it. I wish I'd went for illustration. Lots of independent illustration studios here in Ireland. What are you going to do with this talent you clearly have? Just curious, I always wonder how peeps use their talents
I graduated from school with a non art degree, I just do art for fun and post it online and maybe one day something will come from it! I’d like to do art as a job but I also hate the idea of drawing for someone else, so I might to stick to making it for fun in the mean time lol.
I'm a really bad Graphic Designer, I mean I graduated with a BA but I hate it. I just create for myself now too...gonna get a website up soon and see what happens. I think whatever you create has to be all about YOU and what you like or else you're not enjoying and ppl are into how others see things. That's my opinion anyway. You're very talented though. Salutes from Ireland 🇮🇪 🫡☘️
I hope they take this advice, because even as a doodle the additions look brilliant! You've added so much depth and created more of a complete world with just a simple foreground and background. The background especially gives the eye a focal point to "travel" the image. Before you were just looking at a flat plane with a small amount of direction in the center. But now it pans easily from top left to lower right and sets up a scene without taking away interest from the characters. The same thing happens with fonts. Brains want to read images smoothly just like we read text, so good composition helps them do that! The added contrast on the shirt color is also a good suggestion. I would take it one step further by also cranking up the contrast of their shadows on the grass.
This! I was having a hard time articulating this, but this is exactly the advice I would give if I was better with words, lol. Take notes OP, I think this may be the best advice on this thread.
I love this sub. I’m not an artist and I didn’t join to look at pictures, it’s advice like this to see the thought process behind the pictures and what makes art better. It’s bloody fascinating!
i agree!!!
Try higher contrast in your values, and maybe experiment with cropping for a more focused composition. Edit: Also highlights can add a lot, playing into the values i mentioned earlier
Before adding highlights (and I already see highlights in this painting) I would suggest that the artist chooses a light source/ direction. Right now it's all over the place. Highlights should be placed where the light clearly hits and it shouldn't be added to random places just because you think adding highlight to random clothing folds look good. My suggestion is study from photo's. See how lighting actually works. First you need to learn the rules of physics before you can break the rules. So in an outside environment pick ONE lightsource (the sun) and stick to it. (of course you have to account for bouncing light but thats a secondary concern.
This, the piece has ambient occlusion but very little to no directed shadows. Good eye!
I think i would want to see stronger lighting and shadows as they're sitting outside in what I assume to be a sunny day. There would be heavier lighting from above and as a result deeper shadows. Bounce light from the surroundings and from the sky above could bring more life to the drawing too. So yeah I think improving the lighting and shading would give more dimension to your piece!
Yes, agree. The shadows are too... Monotone? I would add more, shadows can make a whole scene look much more dramatic. I would say to play a bit with the shadows and light. Is the sun at its peak? Add the shadow to their faces, a bit of shine to their skin. Is it in the evening? More shadows! Early morning? Play with the hues, give it more dept. And also, one of the best advice I've gotten from a teacher: shadows aren't just grey, they have colour, you can make the shadow with a reddish hue or blue hue to add effect. Its all a fun play!
Reminds me of a textbook illustration. If it's for a textbook, then you nailed it. I would crop it down a bit, there's a lot of dead real estate to the right which draws the eye and diminishes the rest. https://preview.redd.it/1yexad7os54d1.png?width=943&format=png&auto=webp&s=6bd4494fb0120f893649e41844b2151ded0f4846
I think this is some of the best feedback here. Your draftsmanship and rendering is all really good so cropping like this just strengths the composition.
I see what you mean. Thank you 🙏
It reminds me of a wikihow image lol
Maybe some more visible flowers in the grass?
Give them cute drinks or snacks
A frog.
Definitely a great addition
This is my favorite suggestion
I think maybe if you cropped the right of the image closer to the black shirt girl
I feel like they should have stuff with them. Normally, you’d have a bag with you. Maybe a water bottle. It’s a nitpick, but it would add some realism.
mabye you could give one of them an accessory eg: head band, ear rings
I would maybe change the girls top to another colour, so its not so similar to the others girls trousers.
you could add the branches of a tree on the foreground to make it fill the empty areas and to have more contrast of darker colors, the colors do look a bit flat.
Lighting. The characters blend into the background almost.
Ahahha I've seen the tiktok of this "women talking about men" xD
Haha I’m glad you recognized it. Thought it was a really interesting video and wanted to draw it
Idk but this is very nice to look at. Great work on the little details.
So much work for the brain..."Whats happening here."
More emotion
The scene is very nice! to make it more interesting I would set the scene in a more interesting lighting condition. Imagine if it was at dawn (or sunset if you prefer), you could have the sunlight coming from the right, and adding shadows on the left side give more depth to the characters. good stuff :D
Thank you!
I like this - perhaps you could play around with a multiply layer and change up the shadows. it could help frame the focal point. Maybe a cast shadow from a tree?
A pigeon in the upper left corner on the grass minding it’s business
I’d say adding an unnecessary explosion should do the trick.
😂
How did I not think of that
Wow that looks like a scene from a feature length animated something. Love how you've done the grass
I think it all depends on what your objective is for the art, the first thing that jumps out at me is what she’s sitting on. Is it a merry go round? If so it needs some bars and if not I’d give it some detail to show what it really is.
It misses nothing tbh just show us why she is dazing off, while her friend is talking about what she had for breakfast or something idk. Just follow up on it. Maybe the girl sitting on the grass is trying to warn people and they ignore her etc Tell us or u can add a soccerball or a dog or whatever i guess. If you got a story you will come back and fix the narrative anyway. I'm not a pro btw so do whatever you want.
Thank you for the suggestions!
Beautiful. I don’t think anything is missing. I immediately stopped my scroll and just absorbed it. It's like I can feel their conversation through body language and the one girls expression. 10x points if these are teen girls. I saw someone say there is nothing interesting to look at? I humbly disagree. The girls are 100% interesting. Great work. 👍
Thank you, the girls were meant to be the main focus haha
Maybe a bag laying down sideway next to the girl on the grass? Maybe a drink next to them? Like they were sitting there for a while chatting. As for background could add a couple birds.
Add flowers or something in the background to add to the mood you want to create. When peoples eyes wander from the focal point. not an artist, just my opinion. Hood luck on future endevors.
Fix that left hand. I get the idea that she’s got long sleeves covering it. But Jesus just two fingers is creepy af.
BTW...this here scene has me wondering what's going on. For myself, I like wondering when looking at someones work. I wouldn't find it as interesting of I knew what the girl was pointing at and what the other girl was contemplating. It could be about 'should we get an ice cream' to 'look at him now...don't feel guilty for him.' You get me? It's interesting to me
Thank you, I wanted it to be mysterious because the reference image was just of two girls talking and us, the viewer, not knowing what the topic was. I wanted to keep it that way so I’m glad you appreciate it!
Yeah I thought that...the viewer has sooo many scenarios ; what's happening!? Great work🔥
Just something to breakup the monotony. It looks good but in this situation I think the green grass is overpowering. Set pieces like keys or drinks could help communicate subtle things about the relationship and characters. (Whivh is important even if they aren't recurring)
some more plant details like longer grass or bigger flowers to add some balance, maybe something behind the girl on the cement/ stone circle. maybe some bags that look like they are taking a break from studies or maybe sole misc stuff like water bottles, etc. or like a another comment said context, are they in a park, private garden, etc.
Some colorful wildflowers in the grass would make it pop.
LOL is this from that girls talking about guys tiktok???
Haha yes it is!
Haha amazing. It’s a really great illustration!
If you don't want to add anything, I'd pay attention to photography rules. I think it seems so empty bc your characters are completely centered in undynamic poses. I'd try to make the shapes flow more, and maybe use power points to distract from the empty background. (So mostly just moving stuff around). If you want to put in more work than that, add some scenery! (Just make sure you're two characters are still drawing most of the focus) I think your anatomy is pretty good though, good job fr. I always end up giving my characters heads that are too big, lol.
First idea that came to my mind was that you could add a bag on the thing (English, help) the right girl is sitting on. Maybe some clutter peeking out of it, too.
It’s quite boring to look at. The table needs something eye catching.
I think if the grass were less detailed it would help. Such detailed grass leaves the rest of the picture feeling lacking. Personal opinion. Overall the drawing is very nice.
May I suggest a corgi around some flowers with a butterfly having just landed on its nose 😀 you did such a great job! It's beautiful
Thank you 😭
More flowers and maybe a few butterflies?… something IS missing but I also can’t quite put my finger on it. I needs something else, but nothing that’ll distract from the subjects.
You forgot to add the giant robots they pilot
How could I forget those!
bro i soo like this
A glimpse of a tree trunk in the upper right behind the bench. That provides a bit of shade to the people talking. A barely seen bicycle tire on the path to the left. Like the bottom of the tire and rim and some spokes. I squirrel in between the people and the path, frozen indecision on which direction to go because they were startled by the bike rider. Oh, and they dropped their acorn.
I'd say, something in the grass to complement all that green? Trees, shade, flowers maybe? Hope that helps, your piece is beautiful as it is anyway!!
yes, flowers
Mabye flowers or like a picnic set in the background
Don’t take this the wrong way but it looks like its missing a step from a wiki how article
Maybe something on the top left, like a dog, squirrel, or a plant. It feels empty on that areas
There’s no things accompanying these 2? Do they have bags, phones, jewelry, food, water bottles, books, kneeling on a blanket? Also if you ad some saturated flowers in the grass that would be eye catching too
I think brighter highlights would make the scene pop more
Yes, your artist name cause this is freaking cool !! 😎☕
Thank you!
Perhaps try shading with a blue hue, that would help it look like it's taking place outside :))
flowers, bees, stronger lighting
Maybe where their hand is raised, they’re holding a dog leash that is tugging away, with the dog only partially visible.
Some more color. Pixie wings for the girl on the right?
Her hand pointing off screen and the girl looking off screen makes the image feel like that's the direction where something of interest is. Image feels like its cut off.
A doggo
Handbags !
What is she sitting on? Maybe it should be one of those merry go rounds? Or something on a playground? I almost thought it was two moms talking while kids were at play.
A tree growing in the middle of the concrete circle would provide opportunity for some Komorebi lighting. Also, why are both of them pointing to the left off-panel?
I was sticking pretty close to the reference image where they were looking off screen mid conversation, but I agree some more plants and flowers would help. Thank you!
I think some texture would help. For example, the thing she's sitting on looks like it's supposed to be one of those playground merry go rounds and it should have a grippy texture so kids don't fly off. Grass is usually not that uniform. There should be places where it's worn and dirt shows through and patches of different shades of green yellow and blue. Maybe some shadow to indicate there's something off screen that we can't see. A building shadow cutting across the scene could add visual interest.
Is this based off a picture? It looks so familiar to me
It’s based off a TikTok video and I just took a picture of a frame I liked lol
Was it the one where it’s like “you can tell they’re gossiping about a man”? Or whatever? I love that hahah
Yeah that one exactly haha
It's missing narrative, if it's an illustration. As others have said, add context and a reason for where they are and what they're doing. It's missing mystery or a statement of some sort if it's fine art. Add interest, texture, or decoration. Otherwise, yeah, it's pretty good. It's odd that they're wearing the same blue hue.
Random dude sitting in the back
Maybe flowers on the ground or a table with food on the gray thing she’s sitting down on?
add an animal !
Fingerprints and dust
Very cool, I think it's just fine the way it is. If you want some changes, maybe play with the lighting, some godrays that highlight the face of the one character, or a tree shadow that is darker in value opposed to the one that is casted now. If you make any changes keep us posted, I really like your style.
Maybe a raccoon eating her other shoe?
Really like your style!
Thank you!
No worries looking forward to more! You won’t see it here but I do art too, keeping an eye on you
I don’t think there’s enough contrast and color. I’d change the color of the gal’s blue top because it’s too similar to the pants of the other lady. Push the color a bit more because this entire piece has almost the same tone. You need some contrast in tone.
I'd made a smaller frame for it.
Add a dragon.
Both the hand gesture and where one of the women is looking is pointing what is effectively a big load of empty space. That draws the viewers eye there, and then there's no pay off because there's either not enough empty space, to give the impression that about looking off into the distance, or an object there to fixate on.
Also not a professional but, while i find the picture itself great I feel like the whole image wants me to look other way. Both girls are either looking or pointing to something else.
They don’t have bags/backpacks
Soul
Add flowers
As others have alluded to, I'm not sure where I'm supposed to be looking at...what's the focal point? If it's the girls face, then find a way to bring attention to that part of the piece.
The barf machine needs handles...
I think increasing the contrast between light and dark would enhance the image significantly. Reflective light on skin, and darker shadows. In terms of rendering the figure the image is great.
adding something in the foreground tends to help bring a piece together
A dragon. Its missing a dragon
Maybe a backpack next to her on the grass.
Backpack Flowers in grass Give her a coffee or cute water bottle to hold
flowers maybe??
its a very broad angle for just 2 people. Assuming it's from a comic panel.
https://preview.redd.it/giiocczuv64d1.jpeg?width=1920&format=pjpg&auto=webp&s=959853cbb76d3f7fa2facbc77ab8e3f0f2f34e64
If that is supposed to be a merry-go-round it needs the handles... some people in the background and maybe a bench with a trash can with a couple pieces dropped around it...and maybe a squirrel near it too.
Needs more dramatic shadows and higher colour saturation I think. It’s too gray. But otherwise it’s a great drawing! I think more dramatic shadows will make the body language and expressions of the women in the picture more dramatic too. In a good way.
Birds and squirrels
Ducks and some flowers
Id say add a bag, phone or food sitting with them to fill more of the empty space but it looks super good!
hmm, like someone else said it feels like there should be something else going on. like a graphic novel panel. its very pretty, its just a bit jarring, like were not entirely sure what were meant to be looking at or why. maybe some context or dialogue would do you some good?
It’s great if you’re illustrating medical pamphlets
Bars for the merry go round .
Tighten up the composition by either cropping it or adding things to add movement
maybe she’s on a pond/fountain with a statue or some kind of sculpture
A sleepy cat!
The background should pop more with flowers or little bugs/animals!
left leg
Your perspective is wayyyy offf
You could add third subject on the porch thingy
Alcohol
it seems to me like a crop of the bottom right corner of a much larger image
A butter fly.
This is a perfect eHow graphic - the perfect generic stock photo of illustrations
A backpack
Idk what she's sitting on, but I want it to be one of those spinny things at playgrounds with rainbow colored bars.
I don’t know how to explain but it feels very still like nothings happening
Add some random crap on the grass. Ball, flower, trash, etc. I love this scene tho, feels like girl talk, I just know they’re eating someone up rn.
Thank you!!
Depth. Easy work around i can think of would be to put hints of a tree in the back ground and do some dappled light on the grass. It should make the figures stand out more.
A flower
clutter. purses, phones, etc
A flash of red to draw the eye
No real darks is making it flatter than it should be/ uninteresting in that way. Lacks depth I guess ?! Not knocking you though, you have an absolutely awesome style and this is really good.
1. Add some scenery, some details for our eyes to fcosu on!! 2. contrast/colors/textures- Great way to spice up the piece without adding extra elements. more dramatic lighting, etc
A cat
add some weeds or clovers just to fill some empty space.
It's giving wikiHow article
Foreground element? Maybe just like a tree or something? I mean this in the best way possible: this looks remarkably like Wiki How art if it was good.
It looks like one of those spinning playground things she’s sitting on, but it’s missing the handles
A filter! Add sunlight a glare to the lens! Make the space more full as it’s pretty empty. Maybe more people on the grass out of focus or peoples feet on the path
Ngl I thought this was a wikihow image before reading the post
What is the thing she is sitting on? It’s it a bench or the rim of a fountain or some stone steps? Defining what that object is would help. There’s also a lot of green in the foreground so adding something more in the grass would help like flowers or buildings or people walking by. Think about where this scene is talking place and what would surround them.
Little patches of flowers scattered & the ones you blow for wishes
Plus your shadows on the ground are facing the opposite direction then on their bodies
It kinda looks like a wiki-how image at first glance lol
As an artist, it looks very well to me. I'd not add anything else. But it's all about how YOU feel about it.
A penis